Writing Tip Jar: Be Concise

Writing Tip Jar is a series to help encourage other writers and inspiring authors along their journeys. Happy Friday, and pull out your notebook or click on your cellular notepad! It is time to write.


My flaw as a writer is that I sometimes overwrite. I, too, had to learn to write concisely as well as learn to show and tell and not just say.

Here is a tip from Shrunk & White. I kept my little Shrunk & White book from college because it is an awesome resource for writers. Thanks to my former professor, Dr. Aghahowa, for introducing her students to this resource.

“Vigorous writing is concise. A sentence should contain no unnecessary words, a paragraph no unnecessary sentences, for the same reason that a drawing should have no unnecessary lines and a machine no unnecessary parts. This requires not that the writer make all sentences short or avoid all detail and treat subjects only in outline, but that every word tell.”–Shrunk & White: The Elements of Style

Do you write concisely or do you tend to overwrite? What strategies and tools do you use to write concisely?

Tannika’s Free Writing & Flash Fiction: Flash from Past

Welcome to my new series where I will be free writing and writing flash fiction to have fun, to regain my discipline as a frequent writer, and to stretch and strengthen my writing skills.

This is an old story I originally wrote during college, years ago, for my creative writing class. It is a fictitious, urban story that came from I don’t remember, but it was fun to write. Editing and few changes were made prior to publishing here.

     Jackey and the Stranger at the Bus Stop

Pt 1

Jackey walked up behind the young man sitting at the glass kitchen table. Her long and thin brown legs stretched from the blue jean skirt she wore with a black shirt. The shirt read STAR in rhinestones.

She was quiet and not that that was her nature. But Jackey had a lot on her mind. He had the nerve to ask me to braid his hair, she thought. Still, Jackey neatly parted his hair one row at a time.

Although Desmond had become more of a stranger these days, he was still the love of her life. He was her best friend since high school and they always had each other’s backs. Jackey separated the row of thick, soft hair into three group strands. She overlapped the grouped strands forming Desmond’s first cornrow.

“Ah want that same style as Snoop,” Desmond said in a deep voice that carried its own bass.

“And I want that money that Snoop’s hairstylist makes,” said Jackey. But since I ain’t Snoop’s hairstylist and you ain’t any big time rapper Dez, we just gone have to work with what we got. I don’t have time to do any special styles anyway,” Jackey went on saying. “I have to leave for class in thirty minutes.”

Desmond let out a sigh and playfully jerked his head away from her hands. “Stoppp,” cried Jackey with an attitude. Although Desmond was playing, Jackey was agitated. He didn’t apologize for not making it to her dance contest the night before. All he said was, “something came up and I had to meet up with my peoples, Sean and Chris.”

“I ain’t gone braid your hair again,” said Jackey reaching for the hair that slipped out of her hands. Desmond bent his head back. His brown eyes met hers and he smiled a smile that softened his rough features. Jackey shook her head at the face that bore a long scar from his cheek to his chin. It was the scar that came a year ago from a guy who slashed his face with a box cutter. He was attempting to steal small bags of white, powdery substance from Desmond.

Jackey continued braiding Desmond’s hair. Out of the blue, an old song by Tupac began to play. Desmond flipped open his cell phone and interrupted “me against the world.” Jackey got quiet and continued braiding. “Man it’s in,” said Chris, the voice on the other end.

Desmond was quiet.

“When you coming. You know deez other fools can’t count,” Chris said as if he was speaking through a Walkie Talkie.

“Man you’re crazy,” Desmond said with a slight chuckle. “I’ll be there in an hour.”

Desmond hung up.

“You’re still selling drugs Dez?” asked Jackey who had been listening to the short conversation above his head. She let go of the cornrow she was braiding and looked down at his face. She expected him to look back up at her again to see her face of disapproval.

“You’re selling drugs and hanging with those dumb fools.”

“Man, I ain ‘t got time for this,” Desmond said getting up from the black cushioned chair he was sitting in.

“And why didn’t you come to my dance contest at my school? I don’t even see you unless you want your hair braided or you want some,” Jackey said angrily in one breath.

“It ain’t like you spending time with me,” said a composed Desmond. It’s all about you and your “I got dance practice. I got classes. I have to go to the shop. My friends and I going out,” Desmond said mimicking Jackey.

To be continued…

Can’t Move Forward

After reading the first six chapters of first Samuel, I am beginning to understand how God’s presence and God’s glory are important to the believer, the Body of Christ.

The glory of God, which is seemingly difficult to define, is basically the external manifestation of God’s presence (http://www.biblestudytools.com).

The presence of God is also difficult to define. However, the Hebrew term for presence in the scriptures is translated as “face”. Dwelling in the presence of God means to have a deeper closeness and fellowship, close and personal encounter, a response of worshiping in spirit and in truth as well as a total surrender to God, His sovereignty, and His love.

We can’t move forward without either God’s glory and presence. We need God’s glory in everything–not our glory but His. We need His glory during decision-making, good times, special events and family time, travels, and during trials and tribulations. Where the glory of God goes, there is power, deliverance, and victory.

Living in the presence of God ensures safety, joy, sustainment, and the blessing.

Please read 1 Samuel 1 to 6

Prayer:

Heavenly Father, The Great I Am,

I worship You today! I ask for forgiveness of my sins, disobedience, and even my fear that keeps me focused on my circumstances, frailties, and man. Help me to overcome the fear of man and to have the fear of the Lord. Help me to fix my eyes on Jesus who is the author and perfecter of my faith. Help me to remember that You have all authority and power even over the devil himself. Forgive me for living my life contrary to this. Now God, I ask You also to help me and the rest of my siblings-in-Christ to seek Your presence and glory. We want to live in Your presence and we want Your glory to accompany us daily, even going before us. Have Your way, Holy Spirit, and thank You God for answering our prayers in Jesus’s name, amen!

Trust God & Set The Captive Free,

Tannika Moore

http://www.stcfpoetrybook.com

Writing Tip Jar: Just Write

Writing Tip Jar is a series to help encourage other writers and inspiring authors along their journeys. Happy Saturday, and pull out your notebook or click on your cellular notepad! It is time to write.


Are you having trouble confidently expressing yourself in your writing?  Putting your writing out there can be a very rewarding thing but also a nerve racking one. The fear of not being politically correct, fear of offending others, fear of hearing others’ critiques, fear of not being an expert, fear of releasing too much of our business or imperfections tend to surface and introduce roadblocks to our writing. Or maybe we just dont have the courage to let our hair down and write something challenging and new, thus stifling our ability to be free in exercising and building our talent/natural gift.
I was a person who was proficient in sugar coating, people pleasing–afraid to step on someone’s toes and afraid to displease someone–(still need work  on this) and sometimes it carried into my writing.

It was sometimes difficult to organize experiences and feelings in words. Years ago, I felt blocked because I couldnt translate what I was feeling on paper out of fear.

Later, there would be times, I would hear “just write.” Trust God and just write. And when I obeyed, great sparks emitted through my writing releasing an energy, a flow, and revelations like none other. 
Sometimes we think some great big monster is suffocating our writing. But could it actually be that we may be suppressing our own writing from flowing naturally from the streams of our hearts?

Today’s tip does not condone writing that is birthed from a heart or goal of pushing immorality, unkindness, or prejudice, or tearing down others, or even heartless, undisciplined writing. That is not writing freely, but rather harshly as well as misusing this talent/natural gift. Yet, today’s tip is about just writing freely, being yourself, being authentic, being honest, letting God fully work through you. It is about using our God-given superpower to impact and bless others on paper or screen.

There is a time for everything, and a season for every activity under the heavens: Ecclesiastes 3:1 NIV
http://bible.com/111/ecc.3.1.NIV

There will be times that you hopefully put the pen down and just experience and listen. There will be times also when you have to pick up the pen and just release.

Don’t block your writing. Don’t suppress what you are feeling. Don’t suppress what needs to be said. Don’t suppress what can save someone else’s life. Don’t suppress the truth of what God wanted you to shine a light on. Don’t suppress the goofy, bubbly personality you have. 

Show and tell it on paper, and if God leads you to omit or even postpone something in release during the editing process, then hold it back or don’t release it. You have that right. But until now, let it out. Don’t block your writing because you are afraid to tap into what you’re feeling, or dont think it would sound beautiful, or because you are talking about something different than everyone else. 

And the Lord answered me, and said, Write the vision, and make it plain upon tables, that he may run that readeth it.
Habakkuk 2:2 KJV

http://bible.com/1/hab.2.2.KJV

Someone needs that encouragement, that frankness, that “get yourself together”, that revelation and “aha” moment, that laugh, that realization that one is not alone, and that imperfect writing–yet full of heart and humility on its way to being beautifully and excellently skilled. 

Just write.

Start there.
Put your shoes on honey, your journey awaits,

Tannika

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Come join me along my journey to learn to Trust God and Set The Captive Free. Visit www.stcfpoetrybook.com and get my books, Setting The Captive Free and Wearing Someone Else’s Shoes Ain’t Never Been Me. 


Tannika’s Free Writing & Flash Fiction: Help

Welcome to my new series where I will be free writing and writing flash fiction to have fun, to regain my discipline as a frequent writer, and to stretch and strengthen my writing skills.

Recently, I had an anxiety attack. But….I’m happy to say I fought it but not without God’s grace and strategies. Alone in a classroom with worn carpet, ununiformed chairs, desks, and tables, I prayed, sang along to worship music, recited God’s Word with as much confidence that could be mustered, took deep breaths, focused in on my breathing, texted my best friend to share my ordeal, and then I tried to face it. But when the Holy Spirit also led me to pick up my pen and grab my notebook, I was able to release it. (A couple of lines were added after the initial writing.)

Help

She could no longer run. She tried to hide but her breathing was as loud and frantic as the rain.

As the rain pranced on the pavement and tapped against her window, she began to pray that the nerves in her stomach would relax. That the hairs on the back of her neck would comfortably rest upon it instead of standing erect in fear. That her breathing focused and grew patient.

That the intruder would be revealed. What did the intruder want from her? How did the intruder find her? She gave no permission for this being to inhabit her space.

Even if she could, she would not scream. She gripped her knees with one arm as she leaned against the wall next to her nightstand. All the while, she kept her eyes fixed on the door that was shutting out the intruder and his intensions. She reached for her pad and pen to scribble for help.

She needed help. There is an intruder but the intruder feels so familiar. She was being dragged towards despair yet frozen in fear. Her thoughts churned, her pen moved, and the rain continued to tap also for her attention. She needed help.

Little did she realize that help was already present. He had arrived when she began to pray. He was devoted towards saving her life. She paused her pen and closed her eyes. She managed to quiet her soul for it had grown loud with fear. She focused on her savior. “I am a present help in the time of trouble,” he said. She could no longer hear the intruder, no longer feel the intruder. Maybe this was a false alarm, but her body and soul had believed it was real.

For God hath not given us a spirit of fear; but of power, and of love, and of a sound mind. 2 Timothy 1:7 KJV

Wearing Someone Else’s Shoes 

For those who have read my latest book, you are most familiar with its leading poem, Wearing Someone Else’s Shoes Ain’t Never Been Me, for which my book was named from.

For those who have not, here is a chance to read my poem which centers around coming to the realization of one’s one-of-a-kindness and purpose. It details the confidence that God created you with a destiny in mind and that you are fearfully and wonderfully made. If your DNA wasn’t proof enough that God wanted you to take off another’s shoes and embrace the destiny and being that He purposed for you, then your individual spiritual gifts, and talents, and His setting you apart unto Himself has got to be further clues.

So enjoy this poem and be encouraged!
Wearing Someone Else’s Shoes Ain’t Never Been Me

I was meant to be free/Wearing someone else’s shoes ain’t never been me/With whom I carry on the inside, I shall find my way through the dark/I was meant to not only shine, But carry His spark/By allowing God’s Word to take root in my heart

Don’t limit me with your small beliefs and hindering measures/And don’t block the path to my destiny, my heart’s treasure

Don’t assume that I am through/When I am down and nothing’s new/Keep saying “I’m not going to make it”/Before you know it, I’ve made it, And made it past you!

Keep spreading lies ‘cause you can’t handle what’s true/Get back, Get yourself out of the way ‘cause I am coming through/Some of you trying to latch on Might have to let go/‘cause I have to let go too/

I was meant to be free/Wearing someone else’s shoes ain’t never been me

Those shoes don’t fit/And forcing them to doesn’t seem legitimate/The shoes that were framed and molded for me/Will help me embrace my own destiny/I am set apart and unique
No longer conformed/And I took off my uniform/That kept me fitting in and walking the same/I took off my complacency and no longer walk in shame

No longer seeking the approval of man/ Took some practice and stumbling In these shoes/But now I can stand

I was meant to be free/Wearing someone else’s shoes ain’t never been me

Tannika Moore

Visit http://www.stcfpoetrybook.com for more information on Wearing Someone Else’s Shoes Ain’t Never Been Me or my other book.

Top Ten: My Writing Goals

Ever since I can remember, I have loved writing down my goals as much as I loved writing itself. Writing down my goals gave me a visual and accountability as well as kept me organized and motivated. Checking off or crossing off a goal helped me to feel good about myself. However, sometimes a goal stayed on my list for months; some never met a line or a check mark and have gotten the opportunity to join new goal lists. However, I continue this habit of writing down my goals. According to GoalBand, people with written goals are 50% more likely to achieve than people without goals (http://www.goalband.co.uk/goal-achievement-facts.html#sthash.PldSO1j0.dpuf). 

So with that said, I am going to write down (well type) my top ten writing goals for 2017 and share them with you all. 

                  Top Ten Writing Goals

  1. To write daily or weekly, for the mere purposes of just writing and rebuilding my discipline of a frequent writer.
  2. To reedit/rewrite my children’s book and find an awesome illustrator. 
  3. To write some fiction and revisit my old short stories I wrote in my teen and college years.
  4. To devote quiet and prayer time towards the preparation of the devotional God gave me the idea to write.
  5. To brush up on my editing and writing skills. Got to strengthen my writing and editing!💪
  6. I know this is not writing or editing, but to read more books. It is great ro read the works of inspiring accomplished writers who have been where you have been and have honed their craft.
  7. To write more poetry and try to remember my poems (Help me Jesus!).
  8. To be as authentic and unafraid in writing down what’s in my heart.
  9. To help many of the young people I work with become better writers and thirsty readers excited to embrace books and unafraid to mark a paper with the beautiful arrangements of words.
  10. To remember writing is always fun, well always to a writer!😉 

Are you a writer? What are your writing goals? If you aren’t a writer, share your goals too. I’d love to hear your 2017 goals!

Flashback Friday: Walking In Your Own Shoes

Today, I would like to share with you my top read post of last year which was originally published on January 8, 2016.

On December 5th, I introduced my second poetry book to the world. It is titled Wearing Someone Else’s Shoes Ain’t Never Been Me. It is a long title but every word is imperative. The theme of my book is “walking in your own shoes”, not someone else’s shoes, but your own.

Walking In Your Own Shoes

So, what does “walking in your own shoes mean”? I define this idiom as walking in your own identity, learning and using your own voice, finding and fulfilling your purpose, and living out the destiny God created for you to walk in. It is not a physical walk but a mental, emotional, and spiritual flow you possess all your own. You are the only you God created and although there may be people who look or act similar, no one can fulfill your destiny like you can, the way you can, if you set out to do so. I love Sarah McLachlan lyrics, from In Your Own Shoes, that says it best, “Time for you to walk in your own shoes/Lay down your footprints wherever you choose/Leave it all behind and move on ’cause you are your own woman” (or man, if you are reading this).

Masks, Enormous Loads, And Broken Heels

“Walking in your own shoes” also means letting go of the baggage that has been holding you down and keeping you from moving forward. Are you walking with an enormous load or a broken heel and a broken heart? “Walking in your own shoes” too means removing the masks we often put on to appease others and keep up a facade of how we want to appear before others. What masks have you been wearing?

Walking In My Own Shoes

I wrote this book, like any other books, poems, or writing I do, to get out whatever I need to sort out within and to put down on paper the things I had been learning about life, people, and myself. I wrote some of the poems years ago and the rest I wrote last year, 2015. I have been learning to grow comfortable in my own skin as well as outside of my comfort zone, and I do stress learning. It has to be true about life after 29 (do I have to tell my age, Laughing out loud) when you start to come into who you are because I am experiencing that, amidst some fear and a little anxiety. Although, I have always been goal-oriented, I would not have been able to tell you my purpose before now. I often let people chime in on what I should do and be. But thanks to my strong mom, who has encouraged me to always get off the couch and live and my pastor who impressed upon me to find my purpose and fulfill my destiny, I would not have committed time to seeking out my destiny and purpose these past few years. In this moment along the journey, I am also learning to deal with my flaws, past issues, insecurities, and emotional wounds I’ve incurred along the way. So, I too, am still learning how to walk in my own shoes.

Named for its leading poem, my book, Wearing Someone Else’s Shoes Ain’t Never Been Me, poetically talks about finding your destiny, living life on purpose, embracing your God-given journey and even allowing yourself to be vulnerable (not naive and gullible, but vulnerable) and trusting God to protect you in doing so. We will talk about vulnerability another time.

As always, I love to encourage, so here are some Tools for your Journey!

Here are 24 Walkisms you should have:

  1. Walk in love.
  2. Walk in forgiveness.
  3. Walk in desperate pursuit of God.
  4. Walk in humility.
  5. Walk in peace.
  6. Walk (or dance) in the rain every now and then.
  7. Walk in justice and integrity.
  8. Walk with patience.
  9. Walk alive, not like the living dead.
  10. Walk, smile, and laugh.  A smile and laughter are medicine for the heart.
  11. Walk out of your comfort zone.
  12. Walk to give a hand to those unfortunate than yourself.
  13. Walk and make your mama proud. Return the love and create memories and moments for her like she did for you.
  14. Walk in confidence.
  15. Walk according to your own pace.
  16. Walk in healthy attitudes and habits.
  17. Walk in faith and trust Jesus who died for you because He has your back like no one else can or will.
  18. Walk to make an impact.
  19. Walk in the present, not the past, not the future.
  20. Walk accordingly to the plan God has for you.
  21. Walk in originality. Be yourself.
  22. Walk up to fear, knowing it’s bluffing.
  23. Walk in your season.
  24. Walk, not looking back.

Put your shoes on honey, our journeys await,

Tannika

How have you begun to walk in your own shoes?

The Walls Have To Come Down

What a rough year this has been and we keep coming to these mountains and walls. They got to move! So, when we started reading Joshua and then came to Joshua 6, we got the unction to pray concerning those mountains and walls and to pray in the prescribed method the Lord told Joshua and His people to march around Jericho. 

What walls you desperately need to come down in Jesus’s name? Is it recurring debt, low self-esteem, issues on your job, issues with your children or your spouse, an issue that is recurring in the world that God has moved you to pray about, issues in your church, issues with your health? Gather scriptures concerning the matter because without God’s voice, wisdom, promise, Word on the matter, it won’t happen captain. 

Then pray you won’t doubt even when it seems like there isn’t anything happening. We, ourselves, are on day 2 and day 1 yielded no change, but God had to remind us that the wall didn’t collapse on the first day. So keep going! Have courage. Fight the good fight of faith. Pray without ceasing. Sisters and brothers-in-Christ, you are more than conquerors. He that is in you is greater than he that is in the world.

March around the city once with all the armed men. Do this for six days. Have seven priests carry trumpets of ramsʼ horns in front of the ark. On the seventh day, march around the city seven times, with the priests blowing the trumpets. When you hear them sound a long blast on the trumpets, have the whole army give a loud shout; then the wall of the city will collapse and the army will go up, everyone straight in.” Joshua 6:3‭-‬5 NIV

What walls got to come down in your life? What don’t you want coming into 2017? Declare it be moved in Jesus’s name?

Writing Tip Jar

Happy Friday and Happy Post-Thanksgiving!!!! I hope you had a great Thanksgiving. Last Friday, I shared some writing tips with all my aspiring authors and fellow writers. Here are some more concerning a favorite method I use during my prewriting stage or even when I am planning an event.

It is called outlining.

Outlining is a great method or tool to use for just about any writing: research writing, creative writing, news writing, etc. Outlining allows you to map out in sequential order your main points. It also allows you to organize your thoughts whether you are writing on a particular subject or character sketching. Outlining also allows you to write concisely, stay on topic and make easier transitions when writing.

Try It

Outline your main points, set up a variable structure of what you want to say, and how you want your writing to flow, and allow it to guide you. You will find it easier to flow in writing once you know what or who you are writing about and have drafted an outline.

Put your shoes on honey; Our journey awaits,

Tannika

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